Sirf Tum (A RaDev Story)..FF..Ch48,49,50..on..Pg59 - Page 3

Posted: 15 years ago


I think the C-B creative team should take some hints from you ... you are very good.  👍🏼   😊
This is good script writing for the movies. You have used dialogs very effectively to describe the action/situation.
 
I love Dev's character ... he is a lot like Kanha, naughty and always teasing Radhika. The story is more realistic than the C-B story. None of that confusion between the sisters ... and both them are attracted to Dev in their own way. And I loved the scenario where he is watching her in the rear-view mirror and she is feeling embarrassed. Every woman can relate to this, isn't it ?  😊

Please post the next episode. I am sure this story has its own share of joys and sorrows, but as long as the situation is realistic ... it will always be a winner.




Edited by simi2006747 - 15 years ago
Posted: 15 years ago

Thanks all again.

Next part will soon be updated.
 
Posted: 15 years ago

great parts..Thanks Viadydi that he send Rashika to Dev house..

Now Dadi like her..I really enjoy dev's

mischief..I waiting for next part..Can you give more romance RADEv.. 

Posted: 15 years ago
Originally posted by pop77


great parts..Thanks Viadydi that he send Rashika to Dev house..

Now Dadi like her..I really enjoy dev's

mischief..I waiting for next part..Can you give more romance RADEv.. 

 
Well u'll get what you want in the story....but i hope u know that it has to be situation wise....and now since the story is developing....it might have less of that romance flavor in it....but as we go along i assure u....u might see a lil more n more.
I hope my answer is not that disappointing.
Posted: 15 years ago

 

Chapter 5

 

 

Dev, Radhika and Vishaka enter the mandir…..and Radhika stands in front of Kanha's idol whereas Vishaka after doing the pranam raoms around……Dev on the other hand was admiring Radhika from the distance and notices the clear difference between the two sisters…..He then slowly comes n stands by her and does pranam to the god.

 

The Pujaari ji comes out with the prasad n while giving the Prasad he gives them aashirwaad…."Kishenji aap dono ki Jodi aise hi banaye rakhe."

At that Radhika opens her eyes n looks at Pujaari ji and then turns to the side to find Dev standing next to her……she notices that even Dev doesn't respond to that n infact seemed to be doing pranam to the Pujaari ji.

Radhika was so upset that she suddenly said out loud….."yeh kya rahe hai aap Pujaari ji??"

Pujaari ji looks confused at both Radhika and Dev n then asks…"kyu ??? kya hua beta ??  maine aisa kya keh diya??"

Then before Radhika cud say anything….Dev says…."inka matlab yeh hai Pujaari ji ke abhi hum dono ki shaadi nahi hui hai."

Pujaari ji looks at them n says…."shama karna beta."……n he leaves.

Dev looks at Radhika who was still angry…..and then turns away hiding his smile.

Vishaka from far away envied Radhika and her fate thinking….."kaash ke Radhika ki jagah per main hoti….toh shayad voh aashirwaad mujhe milta."

 

On their way back to Shastriji's house…..all three of them were quite…..Vishaka was upset coz she missed the chance to get the aashirwaad…..Radhika was upset that such misunderstanding happened in mandir…..and Dev he was quiet coz he didn't wanted to embarrass Radhika anymore as she already looked a bit upset with what just conspired few minutes back.

 

They reach home and when getting down Vishaka turns to Dev n asks…."aap andar nahi aayenge??"

Dev looks at Radhika hoping she wud say something but then he answered casually…."May be next time."

Vishaka jokingly asks….."Next time ???.....aap ko toh waise bhi raaste yaad nahi rehte toh phir next time kab ??  jab aap phir se hamein ghar chodne aayenge tab ??"

Dev again looks at Radhika n answers a little flirtishly….."sure……agar aap mouqa dengi toh….kyu nahi."

Dev notices Radhika's eyes on him on that answer n he smiles n then Radhika suddenly turns away watching him smile…..Dev smiles wide n leaves……Vishaka who was bz blushing on Dev's flirtish answer doesn't notice this exchange of glances between Radhika n Dev…..But Radhika turns and comes inside the house.

 

As soon as Radhika steps in….Amma blasts at her saying…."tere bauji ne tujhe vaidji ke yaha kya bheja…tu toh masti mazey karke…itni aaraam se ghar laut rahi hai……laaj sharam naam kit oh koi cheez na hovegi tujh mein….lekin apni maa ka khayal kiya hota….jisko ghar ka baaki ka kaam karna pada hai."

Radhika was about to make an excuse when Vishaka comes in n was still looking a bit dreamy….so amma asks her lovingly…."arre bitiya….tu kaha se aa rahi hai…..bahut deir kardi tune ??"

Vishaka goes to her mom n says…."maa….aaj hamein Dev miley the….vohi Purohitji ke ladke….unko mandir jaana tha…toh maine aur Radhika ne unhe mandir ka raasta bataya……vohi toh hamein abhi ghar chod kar gaye hai….kyu hai na Radhika ??"

Amma looks at Radhika n shouts again…."ab muh kaahe tak rahi hai yaha khadi khadi…..andar jaa aur apni maa ka haath bata."

 

Here at Vrindavan palace….Dev returns home n Daadi asks him as soon as he enters…."kyu re ??.....Radhika ko ghar chodne gaya tha ya kahi aur??....itni deir laga di??"

Dev comes n sits by her on the sofa n hugs her n says….."Daadi….voh main kishen mandir chala gaya tha…isliye thodi deir ho gayi."

He then puts his head on Daadi's lap n remembers that Pujaari's aashirwaad.

 

Next morning…Dev goes out for a walk with his camera n Birju also joins him…..they both reach the panghat and Dev takes out his camera n start taking pics of the sunrise…..then he just puts the camera down n stares at one place remembering the first time he saw Radhika on the other side of the Panghat.

Birju comes n looks at him staring nowhere…he tries to follow his stare….but sees nothing in front of them so he asks….."Dev bhaiyya…..aap kahi dekh rahe ho ya kuch sonch rahe ho??"

Dev smiles n shakes his head n says…."kuch nahi Birju…..bas aise hi kuch yaad aa gaya tha."

 

Radhika was on the same side of the panghat listening to the flute…a little boy was playing……Neither she was able to see Dev nor Dev cud look at her coz she was behind a wall in her own dreams with her eyes closed.

Dev followed to where the flute's sound was coming from….he asks the boy if he can play the flute…..the boy smiles n hands him his flute…..n Dev starts playing it.

 

He played it so nicely that it brought a smile on Radhika's face who was still unaware of him around…..Wind was blowing on her face n still with her eyes closed she hugs herself when the cold breeze touches her skin…..and coz of the wind her duppatta catches fire from the aarti ki thaali that other couple was holding n passing by her.

Dev then turn towards the other side n was still a little lost in playing it….but then he sees someone's duppatta on fire…..he hands the flute to Birju n runs towards that person who was half hidden on the otherside of the wall.

 

Without knowing who it was….Dev with so much concern……holds her hand n pulls her towards him n grabs her burning duppatta n throws it in the air…..but before he cud realize that it was Radhika…..he felt her hand on his face hitting hard……and that's coz Radhika slapped him hard.

 

Still unaware of what just happen….Radhika looks into his eyes fuming with anger…..and even Dev was staring back at her….but this time even he was furious at her.

Posted: 15 years ago
wow......dang slap...kya yarr....anyways nice update yarr cant wait for more...lol i just dont want it to end every time i read it.....anyways update soon...nice part
Posted: 15 years ago
WOW!!!! a slap.
thats interesting. cant wait to find out what u have in my mind for them in next part.
pls do cont soon.
Posted: 15 years ago
Thanks all for nice comments....Will try to post the next update soon.
Keep Reading. 😊
 
Posted: 15 years ago
she slapped dev😒
mad at you radhika 😡
you don't even know the poor guy helped you😭
great update
please cont soon
Posted: 15 years ago

 

 

Chapter 6

 

Dev cudnt understand what just happened....but when he looked at Radhika....she looked too upset about him just touching her.

 

Radhika looked into his eyes n asked...."aap ki himmat kaise hui mujhe haath lagaane ki....aag hi bhujaani thi toh keh dete…..main khud hi apna dupptta jhatak deti....aapko mujhe chune ki zaroorat kya thi???....mujhe yeh sab pasand nahi."

Dev was quite surprised to hear her ungratefulness...."aap samajhti kya hai.....ke miane jaan bhooj kar aapka haath pakda....agar main nahi aata toh aag aapke duppatte se hat kar aapke kapdo pe aa jaati....aapko uska koi ehsaas nahi ??"

 

Radhika was silent for a second coz she too knew that she was kinda over-reacting...."main jaanti hoon...ke aapne meri madad karni chahi.....magar aap jaise sheher ke log yeh nahi jaante ke vrindavan ke log bahut seedhe saadhe hote hai....hamein yeh sab pasand nahi hai....koi agar dekh leta toh pure vrindavan mein badnaami ho jaati…..per aapko kya fark padta hai….aap yaha ke logo ke bare mein kyu sonchne lage…..kisiki izzat ke bare mein kyu sonchenge."

Dev understood her point of view as well....and then very politely he said...."maine uss baare mein soncha nahi.....uske liye i'm sorry.....uss waqt mujhe kuch samajh nahi aaya....waise aap ghabraiye mat...kyunki agar koi dekhega toh bhi kuch keh nahi paayega kyunki maine aapko jaan bhoojh kar toh haath nahi lagaya na….main toh sirf aapko aag se bachaa raha tha."

 

Radhika looked at Dev n was surprised and embarrassed at the same time noticing how he was being so patient with her……and accepted his mistake so easily…even though it was her who did a big mistake by slapping him hard on his face….when he was trying to help her…..She nodded hesitatingly saying…."haan….magar log toh baatein banate nahi thakte."....n she turns away n says...."mujhe bhi maaf kar dijiye ke maine aap per haath uthaya."

 

Dev shook his head to say 'its ok'...but instead found Radhika still looking a little disturbed just thinking about what others will say....and then something strikes his mind.....n he leaves.

Radhika turns n when she doesnt see him....she thinks he might be still mad at her...and he shud be coz she didnt think n had slapped him hard....what cud he be thinking of her now.

 

She walks into a shed n was quite embarassed to go home....n suddenly she feels someones arms around her....n she jumps on the touch again....she turns n finds Dev putting a pink colored duppatta around her.

When he notices a question in her eyes...Dev says...."maine soncha shayad aap yahi sonch kar pareshaan ho rahi hogi ke aap ab bina dupptta ghar kaise jaayengi....isliye maine....aur waise bhi mujhe laga shayad yeh rang aap per bahut khilega…isliye yeh le aaya."

 

Radhika gets a light smile on her face n keeps looking at him....n then imagines herself lost in his eyes as he also stares back at her.

She imagines Dev saying in his most romantic tone...."waise yeh rang aap per bahut achcha lagta hai."....On this she blushes n turns away....and when she turns back to say thanks for the duppatta....she sees no one there n when she looks around she sees Dev leaving.....then she realizes it was her dream.

She thinks to herself that she forgot to thank him....as he had helped her twice in these few moments and both the times he went out of his way to help her......she smiles in herself n blushes again.

Then suddenly her mood changes...n Radhika all confused by her mixed emotions...says to herself..."yeh mujhe kya ho raha hai kanha...main yeh kya sonch rahi hoon."

She shakes her head to get out of the dreams n takes a deep breath n leaves to go home.

 

Dev was in his room sorting out the pics he had taken on the last few days...and then he saw a pic of Radhika....and that pic was from the time when he first saw Radhika playing with Nandu on the other side of the panghat.

He closed his eyes n remembered her laughter n then he imagined Radhika in that pink duppatta he bought for her today....and then he remembered her smile.

 

Still lost in her thoughts...Dev opens his eyes n puts his hand on his cheek...remembering the slap n says to himself..."gussa jitna kadak....muskurahat utni hi thandi.........meethi........masoom."

Birju who came in his room to give him some juice says....."masoom ??  kaun voh chaate wali ladki ??   aapko voh masoom kaise lagi....mujhe toh ek number ki nakchadi lagi voh."

Dev looks at Birju n says...."nahi yaar Birju.....voh waisi ladki nahi hai....uski jagah koi aur ladki bhi hoti na vrindavan ki toh voh bhi vohi karti jo Radhika ne kiya."

Birju still was correcting Dev saying...."nahi nahi Dev Bhaiyya....koi aur ladki hoti na toh aapko dhanyavaad kehti usse jalne se bachane ke liye......utha kar chaata nahi maarti."

Dev shakes his head n then goes n stands by the window and leans his shoulder on the side n says..."shayad isliye voh koi aur ladki nahi hai.....Radhika hai....sabse alag."......then he turns n looks at Birju who takes a disagreeing sigh n goes away.....Dev smiles n takes a deep breath and stares out the window saying to himself......"dil karta hai....tum bas saamne baithi raho....aur main tumhe dekhta jaao."

 

Radhika was also looking out the window from her room....and with a deep sigh she folds her hands in front to hug herself n then she holds the duppatta n thinks of Dev.

She goes n stands in front of the mirror....she sees Dev standing behind her....and then when Dev takes her duppatta in his hands....Radhika just keeps staring at him from the mirror.

Dev takes the duppatta n puts its around her from the back keeping an eye contact with her from the mirror.....and then he encircles his arms around her and pulls her towards him....Radhika gets a mixed feeling of strangeness n happiness which she cudnt understand....she closes her eyes when Dev rests his chin on her right shoulder and like a whisper near her ear....he says...."tum per yeh rang bahut achcha lagta hai."

Radhikaz heart was pounding fast and felt like butterflies in her stomach....she opens her eyes n looks at him from the mirror n Dev stares back at her very seductively n he slowly turns her around to face him n holds her face in his hands n says...."jab bhi mere baare mein sochogi....mujhe hamesha apne khareeb paaogi."

And then he pulls her close n places a kiss on her forehead....Radhika closes her eyes on the touch of his lips n felt a tingling feeling in her heart.....n when she opened her eyes she sees no one around.....it was yet another dream of hers imagining Dev so close to her.

Radhika gets embarassed at herself n runs towards the outhouse n sits in front of kanhaz idol....n says...."yeh kyu ho raha hai kanha....kya chahte ho tum?.....abhi abhi toh nazraaz thi main unse....phir achanak itna khareeb kyu mehsoos kar rahi hoon unko…..yeh meri galti hai ya tumhari marzi?"

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