ArHi FF: Jaane Doh Naa Updated 150 [Feb 4, '13] - Page 4

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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Orange101

Nice start!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ Do continue soon!


Thanks!

Originally posted by: Alicia2001

wow great story plz update soon
this one is really good
thanks for the pm


Thanks hun!

Originally posted by: ashred12

very interesting prologue...pls continue soon...


Thanks! Will update soon!

Originally posted by: ipkknd-fan

This seems really interesting 
Plz pm me further parts :)


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Thank you!

Originally posted by: Anjinie

Thanks lovely update,


Thanks hun!

Originally posted by: archita_59

Please update soon! Its sooo good!


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Originally posted by: lakraj80

Very interesting! Pls pm me whn u update it next. Tfs!


Will do! 
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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: flowers4u

omg beautifully written love dit


Thank you soo much!

Originally posted by: zarlish18

๐Ÿ‘U STARTED ANOTHER FF...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘

very nice update...do pm me whenever u write more 

p.s i hope u will write another  jai-bani ff 2 ๐Ÿ˜‰

thanks 4 da pm


I was gonna write another JB one... except, i still need to plan it out. So, i thought i will write this in the mean time! Thanks so much for comment hun! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ


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Originally posted by: pavi1

sounds interesting...
continue soon please...


Thanks, will post the next part soon! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ


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Originally posted by: Usma55

where is Khushi

hope she is fine
update soon and please add transaltions to the hindi conversations please


You will find out where Khushi is soon! I will try my best to add the translations to the prologue soon... but from now on the parts will be english! ๐Ÿ˜ƒ

Originally posted by: Arshifan4life

Nice concept I would love to read more


Thanks! will update soon! 

Originally posted by: SAforever

beautifully written
do pm me the next part

update soon =D


Thanks! Will PM you for sure! 


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Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: my1stlovearnav

plzz update the part and pm me!!!!!1


Will do! 

Originally posted by: Rhysenn

Amazing! Hope Khushi gets the justice she deserves!


Yes, justice is on its way! ๐Ÿ˜‰ Thanks for commenting!


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Originally posted by: Ashu2005

Sounds interesting!!


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Originally posted by: orchidpurple

Nice start...
Khushi left him...good for her...she does not deserve such a life of hatred and torture...
Surprised to see Payal ...so strong ...
Truth is finally out...
Hope Anjali did not listen to Payal- Arnav Conversation..to fall unconscious...

Thx for the PM

Waiting for the next part...

OP


Thanks OP! I am proud of Khushi too! And payal... well, she i wish she was as strong in the serial too! And you will find out soon enough if Anjali heard or not! ๐Ÿ˜‰

Originally posted by: samia19

awesome concept,
please pm me when u update


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Originally posted by: tanasha1993

Hey there! 
Finally got the time to catch up with fanfics and saw your PM
The prologue seems really nice! Can't wait to read the next part
Wonder where Khushi could have gone to :/
Anyways do pm me again after you update!:)
Love
Tanasha


Thanks! Khushi has gone to a good place... ๐Ÿ˜† You will find out in the next update!

Originally posted by: deep5128

Nice FF. Continue soon.

Pls PM me when updated!


Thanks!


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Originally posted by: Ezther

o my gosh!!!!!I can't wait to read ahead...this is really really good!!!!

take it from an avid reader and writer...

you're the best babes!!๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿผ


Aww! Thanks so much! I think you are definitely gonna like this one! ๐Ÿ˜‰
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Posted: 11 years ago
That was really well written and interesting! Do continue soon and PM me. :)
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Posted: 11 years ago
Hello Everyone! 

Thanks so much for the response! Didn't expect so many people to like it! So, here is the next part. Enjoy!

Comments on Pg. 5 and Pg. 6

Jaane Doh Naa
CHAPTER ONE
A New Beginning
 
TWO YEARS LATER
 
"Can you believe," Khushi said, her arms struggling to hold a big roll of fabric, that was clearly too heavy for her. "the price of velvet doubled in less than a day?"

With difficulty, she managed to place in atop the counter in front of her. "At this rate, designing clothes will be more expensive than buying gold!"
 
Khushi looked at the girl infront of her, waiting for a response (a usual "hmmm" or "yeah, you are right"), but received nothing in return. She rolled her eyes and said in an exasperated voice, "Seriously Ayesh, why are you freaking out? Why don't you"- her fingers made quotation marks in the air- "chill?"
 
Ayesh โ€“ Ayesha Kapoor โ€“ stared blankly at her best friend, her face pale and sweaty. Being in her mid-twentines, she had long legs, a killer-figure and curly hair that framed her small face. If Khushi didn't love her to the core, she would have been very envious of her. She held a certain aura, that drew your eyes to her whether you wanted it to or not.
 
"Khushi," Ayesha whispered. "What will happen to us?"
 
"Nothing," Khushi answered, nonchalantly. She instantly recognized this as the onset of a breakdown, which Ayesha had atleast once week. She was in all sense โ€“ a drama queen. "Stop worrying and try to breathe okay?"
 
The corner's of Ayesha's mouth began to quiver. "I am breathing!"
 
Khushi only shook her head. "Its very simple my love," she said, walking over to sit beside her on the plush sofa. "One breath in, one breath out. And repeat!"
 
"Okay, stop making fun of me! But seriously, I am getting worriedโ€ฆ will they like our designs?"
 
Khushi looked at her best friend, seeing not the stylish fashion designer Ayesha Kapoor, who made the papers almost every day, but the lost girl she found, stranded on the train to Lucknow which she stumbled upon almost two years ago now. It was a very dark night, with two girls sitting in the same compartment, trying to somehow patch up their broken hearts.
 
For Khushi it was her contract marriage, which she ended on her own terms, and yet still didn't find peace. The moment she stepped out of the Raizada house, she thought she would feel relief; free of the burden that was thrust upon her shoulders. Only she didn't. She was in all sense, alone in the world once again and more than that completely hollow on the inside. Her eyes even refused to shed tears. She stumbled across Delhi for an entire day, before finally deciding to pay Lucknow a visit. Afterall, it was where her life started. But Devi Maiyya seemed to have other plans (no change there!) and she met the girl who became her life.
 
And for Ayesha, it was a fake engagement that broke her. Being orphaned at the age of six, she had many dreams of starting a family of her own, and when she thought she finally found her Prince Charming, he ended up using her. Angry, she caught the first train she saw, away from the mockery she became.
 
What transpired on the train that night was not something the girls could put in words, but it was definetly one of the strongest things they ever felt in their lives. It was almost as if fate gave them a chance to rebuild their hearts, away from the people who destroyed them.
 
And two years from then, both Khushi and Ayesha were found ruling the city of Pune with AK's Seams of Style, a boutique which was recently given the number one position in the world of fashion. How, when and why they got there, was a story only they knew. It was just two years of labour, luck and dedication. Their anger at fate, resentment at life and disappointment with their weakness somehow brought out beautiful designs, which were found in almost every magazine now.
 
Of course, the most important of all the changes in their lives, was their friendship. Ayesha and Khushi could be almost called twins now. They read eachother's mind, wore eachother's clothes and more importantly helped each other in ways that even their family couldn't. It was soothing for both to wake up every day, without having to worry about pretenses or pain or heart breaks. And for Khushi, that was more than she could ask for it. It almost felt surreal that she was forced into a marriage of hate and that too on a contract!
 
"We should cancel the meeting," Ayesha said, bringing Khushi back from her thoughts. "We are not ready."
 
"Of course we are ready!"
 
Khushi stood up and began tidying up the cluttered room. But it was no use. It was a vast space, with shelves lining up the walls, where endless rolls of fabric were stored. In the center was a huge a counter, on which there was everything and anything, including their half eaten dinner.  There were also boxes and boxes of threads, beads, glues and a sewing machine stowed in the corner. It was a muddled place, but was the girls' favourite room. This is where they designed clothes, the one place they left all their troubles at the door. 
 
However, it was a stressful week for them both.
 
After climbing high on the success ladder, they finally started receiving offers from big companies and after many negotiations, one of the companies finally agreed to come see their designs. Of course, every since they got the confirmation, Ayesha was on a roller coaster of emotions, changing from being excited to being depressed in a matter of minutes. Sometimes, Khushi failed to understand how her friend could experience all these things at once! But she accepted it with delight, for Ayesha was the only colour left in her life.
 
"Maybe we should try to westernise this," Ayesha said, picking up a bridal outfit they only managed to finish yesterday. "Its too traditionalโ€ฆ you know what I mean?"
 
Khushi tilted her head, trying to find faults, but she couldn't. It was a beautiful design, definetly the jewel of their collection. "No Ayeshโ€ฆ Its perfect. Besides, wedding outfits should be traditional."
 
Ayesha rolled her eyes. "Gosh, you are still the same. Wake up baby; this is the twenty-first century!"
 
"How much more do you want me to change? I already stopped wearing salwars, had my hair cut and started wearing high heels!"
 
Ayesha grinned. "They look good on you! Trust me!"
 
"Always do!"
 
In addition to the dramatic changes in her appearance, Khushi also owned something else โ€“ a degree in fashion designing. She was proud of it, because it meant that she would never be thought of as a worthless thing, who didn't have a place in the world of the rich. Of course, not that she had a choice โ€“ when Ayesha decided on something, it happened, even if the world burned down in the process.
 
"This is good," Ayesha said, picking up a royal blue salwar. "I like how you added the ruffles in the end. It's a nice touch!"
 
Khushi took a bow. "Thank you! Does this mean I get a pay raise?"
 
"Depends," Ayesha answered, looking through the rest of their outfits. "How many times are you willing to make tea for me?"
 
Khushi laughed. "So, I am judged not on how I sew, but on how I make tea for you?"
 
"Of course! I have told you many times, you should start a side chain โ€“ Khushi ki Chai; joh bhi piye, sirf khushiyan hi khushiyan!" (Translation: Khushi's Tea; whoever drinks, they will find only happiness!)
 
"You know, I am so glad, you didn't come up with the name for our boutique. You suck!"
 
Ayesha aimed a scarf at Khushi. "Shut-up!"
 
The two girls fell into silence, as Ayesha once again inspected their collection. She was a perfectionist โ€“ from the way she dressed to the way she designed. Khushi sometimes couldn't help but admire her strength. She somehow pulled her up from the depths of despair she was locked in. She managed to push her into getting a degree. She inspired her to become a designer. And she taught her how to move on. At times, Khushi seriously wondered where she would have been if it wasn't for this being named Ayesha Kapoor.
 
"That's everything," Ayesha said finally, before sitting down on the sofa once again.
 
Khushi nodded. The designs passed the inspection, so they were beyond good!
 
"Wait!" Ayesh said suddenly, sitting up. "WHERE ARE THE CONTRACT PAPERS?!"
 
Khushi jumped at the outburst as Ayesha began to frantically look for the papers.
 
"AYESHA!" Khushi yelled back. "They are right beside you! CALM DOWN!"
 
Ayesha heaved a sigh of relief and slumped back onto the couch.
 
"I swear Ayesha," Khushi said, shaking her head. "I feel sorry for your heart! The poor thing always works on overtime. I wouldn't be surprised if it gave up on you one day!"
 
"But I will still live, just to annoy the hell out of you!"
 
"I love you too Ayesh!"
 
Ayesha snorted and quickly settled into her world of gloom. "I really hope we get thisโ€ฆ"
 
"You will," Khushi answered confidently. "I mean after obessing about designing for big companies for almost all your life now, Devi Maiyya has no choice but to relent, right?"
 
"You know, if it was upto your Devi Maiyya, my parents would still have been alive."
 
Ayesha was an atheist, but Khushi believed it to only be resentment at all the bad things in her life. "And then would you have met me?"
 
"It was random chance we both took the same trainโ€ฆ nothing more."
 
"Forget it," Khushi said. "Arguing with you is impossible. Anyway, you never told me which company is coming to see the collection!"
 
"Seriously?" Ayesha's voice was exasperated. "Why don't you do the paper work with me? Then you would know exactly who was coming today!"
 
"Oh pleaseโ€ฆ I can't do all that. Its boring and looks like gibberish to me!"
 
"Yeah, but if something happens to me and-"
 
Khushi silenced her with a finger on her lip. "I already lost my family twiceโ€ฆ I am not going to let it happen a third time."
 
Before Ayesha could answer however, they heard a car pull up into the drive away.
 
"THEY ARE HERE!" she squealed. And after a quick look in the mirror, she picked up the file and dashed out of the room to greet the guests.
 
Khushi almost laughed. Two minutes ago, she thought, picking up the dresses they were about to present. She was worried about them showing upโ€ฆ and now, she is jumping up and down in excitement, not even nervous. And I am pretty sure, outside, she will be all professional, as if she doesn't give a damn about the company who is coming to see the designs!
 
As she took a last sweep of the room, her eyes fell on the idol of Durga. With a smile, she folded her hands in a prayer and said "Please Devi Maiyya, let the company people like our designs. Ayesha worked hard on them, and even though she is angry with you, help her out!"
 
Touching her feet, Khushi took a deep breath and walked out into the living room, where the sponsors were seated.
 
"Good Morning," she greeted cheerfully before stopping short, her voice caught in her throat.
 
Sitting with two others, Arnav Singh Raizada stared back at her. 
 
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I KNOW - bad place to end! ๐Ÿ˜†
But will be looking forward to your opinions about this... especially since ASR is back in the story now! ๐Ÿ˜‰ 

Cheers!

Archi

P.S. - the next update might be a bit late, because I am out of town for the weekend. But will try my best to update soon! 


Edited by -Archi- - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
What will Arnav and khushi say to each other
Update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
OMG! awesome work..love how Khushi s spirit is still indefatigable...please update soon
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Posted: 11 years ago
loved it...
see i commented...!
thanks for the pm archi...
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Posted: 11 years ago
oh wow this is great! pls add me to the pm list!!
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Posted: 11 years ago
amazing ...๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘๐Ÿ‘
nice update...๐Ÿ˜›
thanks for the pm...๐Ÿ˜Š