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Posted: 11 years ago
This was just an idea I couldn't get out of my head, wrote something and posted it here ! Its a bit short too😳


Keshav desai has endured immeasurable pain in his life,he has spent days in a smelly lockup in jail,has been on the receiving end of many slaps mainly from his father who kinda has a preference for public slapping,has been beaten up black and blue by an endless heap of fat rolls aka tiger but nothing could possibly compare to what he was going through right now. He was crouched  behind a prickly bush ,his body parts numb from staying here too long,watching his rival in RA on what seems like a date with kiya gujral.Gosh,even saying the word date in his mind hurt like hell.  He had no idea how,when and why it happened but it seemed like he has fallen inexplicably and irreversible in love with his chicklet . kiya gujral, formerly known as chicklet was now the centre of his existence. Ignoring her was like denying his body of oxygen. Here she was , sitting on the egde of a pool ,laughing at the silly antics of ranveer ,her already  luminous skin bathed in moonlight oblivious to the fact that he was here too albeit hidden like some low life stalker. His heart constricted at the sound of another one of her smiles. She laughed so freely and there was a time when those smiles were directed to him. He lost it all due to his boorish behaviour. Kd was known as the master planner by his friends, he could get out pf almost any situation on the basis of his wits alone. Heck, this was the way he earned his pocket money by selling ideas to his fellow school friends. But when it came to getting his girl back, he was acting like a dim witted imbecile. He knew that the situation was calling for grand gestures but instead of thinking of one, he was busy picking off chits from the dustbin and spying out in dark lying on dirt.  Every time he saw her he wanted to say something constructive and make her realize that he knew he was wrong and would even spend the rest of his life making up to her  if she would let him but what he muttered  was "am sorry "  repeatedly like an addled-brain idiot pissing her off even more .  Sound of water splashing broke him out of his reverie. He looked up to see what see where it was coming from and wish he had not. Kiya and RV were splashing water on each other now laughing like five-year-old kids. It was all he could take today; he turned his head away from the sickly sweet sight of them, crawled a little further on his hand and knees far from their sights, stood up and walked away home. His mind was made up now, he was going to stop acting a la imbecile and get his woman back  .


Ps: sorry for the grammar mistakes, did not cross check it 😳
The credit for the name goes to sanu and pumpkin..
love you girls🤗
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Posted: 11 years ago
Res
Unres!!

Diyaaa ...
Tune kya likhaaa!!
Maine tujhe pehle he keh chuki hun ki tune kyaa likhaa hain!!!
Loved it!! Loved it!! And loved it!!!
Do I hv to say something!!!
Loved the way u described KD!!!
Awesome start!!!!!!!!!
Yaar maine CCT main OS ke baare main itna likha ki ab lavzz nahi hain!!!
I just loved it and u know that !!!!
Aur hain continue soon aur pm kar diyo!!! Nahi to I hv to stalk ur thread!!!!
Edited by JaseTBP - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
*unresd*

*am not gonna even change a single letter of what I sent as PM to you yesterday, am pasting the same here*😆


trin trin tuje zara sa bi andhazaa hai ki tu kitne acche se liki hai...!!!!😲


Its flawless and mindblowing...
Gosh mein tumhe batha nahi sakthi how much I loved it...!!!!!😳
this was superbly fantastic...!!!😃

PS: meri personal opinion.., why cant you continue this as a SS or FF..??😳


PPS: I commented...  uss PS wala Q ke liye no need to answer as u have already said me🤣



Edited by rashmi24sya - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
omg this was freaking awesome👏
loved the way u potrayed KD's emotion😊
plz can u continue this plzzz
do write more , and pm me next time if u can😊

-razz
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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: arhadlove

omg this was freaking awesome👏
loved the way u potrayed KD's emotion😊
plz can u continue this plzzz
do write more , and pm me next time if u can😊

-razz


aww ..thanks😳
I thought it was a bit too sappy!
glad you like it..If am free, will continue it , and you will be among the first pmed😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: diya90


aww ..thanks😳
I thought it was a bit too sappy!
glad you like it..If am free, will continue it , and you will be among the first pmed😳


awww thk u soo much diya for pm and also for continuing😳
and dnt worry u wrote awesome👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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wow girl wat an update dear 🤗

i m just speechless...itne dino tak kaha chipaaya tha yeh talent

ur first work but doesnt really seem like its ur first 👏 👏 👏 👏

 Ignoring her was like denying his body of oxygen...wow yeh kaha se aaya...i m going to use it somewhere

mein toh teri fan ho gayi hun re...aur kya bolun


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Posted: 11 years ago
Originally posted by: rashmi24sya

*unresd*


*am not gonna even change a single letter of what I sent as PM to you yesterday, am pasting the same here*😆


trin trin tuje zara sa bi andhazaa hai ki tu kitne acche se liki hai...!!!!😲


Its flawless and mindblowing...
Gosh mein tumhe batha nahi sakthi how much I loved it...!!!!!😳
this was superbly fantastic...!!!😃

PS: meri personal opinion.., why cant you continue this as a SS or FF..??😳


PPS: I commented...  uss PS wala Q ke liye no need to answer as u have already said me🤣




kal ke badle aaj hi copy paste ho gaya !! tum to bilkul lazy nahi ho 😆😆
Itni tareef kar rahi ho meri !!! khushi bardash nahi ho rahi 😆😆
thank you pumpkin , wouldn't have posted this anyway if you and sanu did not told me to!!
jab study se bore hogi , to continue karne ki try karugi !!😆
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Posted: 11 years ago
 finally un resd🤣

Yeah mein bilkul lazy nahi hu, am super fast you know in only 'copy pasting' 🤣

Hmmm see so many compliments you got for this OS and many wants you to continue it too...
Dont knw when you will get bored by ir studies, but try to think of continuing this OS soon...😉
Vaise, Thanks for crediting me and Sannu..., afterall we took almost 2 days to convince you to post it 🤣



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Originally posted by: rashmi24sya

res 2nd time 🤣


tere comment ke liye I shall again comment only tomorrow...!!!
am too sleepy to comment now🤣


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thank you for your reses !!🤣
jaa ke soja ab..barun dreams me wait kar raha hai tera!!