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Rads

@Effervescent_R

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Posted: 10 years ago

This content was originally posted by: NonComposMentis
Radsy!! 🤗
kiddoo🤗
I'm liking how this has started.
The mysterious death of a top Hollywood actress, interesting!
This was short, Radsy. :/
Make the next one longer!! :O
this was just a base girlie dont worry its gonna be a long chap 2

Anyway, back to chapter 1.
I like it.
i really, really like it.
It opens with a bang, seedhe plunging one into the events.
And the two leads seem interesting too! :D
The rule-breaker guy and the sassy lady!
Niice! ;)
u are so gonna enjoy the journey ahead Kiddo mark my word on that😉😉

Update soon, okay? :)
Sorry for the late reply!
yes I will😃
Love always,
Mugs.

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sia

@Sia889

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Posted: 10 years ago

Dan han, nothing can be impossible for this one.. urm to soon to say that.. will wait until he meets Rose.😛

And Rose, poor she.. but its her job... I was wondering if there is a twist like umm I'll PM u that😉

Plz check my previous comment..have unreserved it.😳

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/92737455

And that was a fine write.. interesting again..👏

Keep writing more⭐️

Thanks for the PM🤗

Love & Regards
Sia

Edited by sankalp_prapti - 10 years ago

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Rads

@Effervescent_R

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Posted: 10 years ago

This content was originally posted by: sankalp_prapti
Say it my terrible lazy or busy... I,..umm kick me oh yeh you can do that.!😆

Sorry for the late!
no probs Babe😛
The into was super dhansu.. oh my, if I should put anyone to envision these characters.. I'd put the BEST, as the concept itself!⭐️
whooaaa!!! now thats something!!
So far super good.. love the strong n self reliant woman.
does the woman remind u of someone??😉😉😛
Thanks for the PM and the patience to wait😛
Keep writing ...its interesting indeed.
yaaa sure will update soon😃😃
Love & Regards
Sia

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Rads

@Effervescent_R

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Posted: 10 years ago

This content was originally posted by: sankalp_prapti

Dan han, nothing can be impossible for this one.. urm to soon to say that.. will wait until he meets Rose.😛
lol...thats the idea to make ppl curious abt their 1st encounter😉
And Rose, poor she.. but its her job... I was wondering if there is a twist like umm I'll PM u that😉
sure m waiting😉😉
Plz check my previous comment..have unreserved it.😳

https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/post/92737455
already checked and commented😛
And that was a fine write.. interesting again..👏
thanks a ton hon😛
Keep writing more⭐️
sure thing😉
Thanks for the PM🤗
anytym🤗🤗
Love & Regards
Sia

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-Razzy-

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Posted: 10 years ago

Radsy 🤗

this was like OMG !!!!!!

totally what i expected form you A Strong writing and a fantastic storyline

Haven't even read 1st chapter and i guess i am already crawling in dan and rose ship

Damn both are strong willed , confident , competetive , ambitious !!!!

ohh i am soo gonna love this , Amazing

chapter 1

What an amazing Kick-start already a murder case 😆

oh both dan and rose gonna be involved in it

i am expecting some amazing action scenes in further episodes

the way you wrote the whole thing was just soo increasing my curiousity

and you ofcourse know how much i love the spy thriller/love stories <33

lolz why do i have a feeling that rose gonna make dan's life a roller coaster ride ;)

haha we will see

Radsy i soo regret commenting before

this piece is awesome !!!

i am soo gonna wait for next chappy

love ya :*

Edited by -Razzy- - 10 years ago

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Rads

@Effervescent_R

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Posted: 10 years ago

This content was originally posted by: -Razzy-
Radsy 🤗
this was like OMG !!!!!!
totally what i expected form you A Strong writing and a fantastic storyline
Haven't even read 1st chapter and i guess i am already crawling in dan and rose ship
Damn both are strong willed , confident , competetive , ambitious !!!!
ohh i am soo gonna love this , Amazing

chapter 1

What an amazing Kick-start already a murder case 😆
oh both dan and rose gonna be involved in it
i am expecting some amazing action scenes in further episodes
the way you wrote the whole thing was just soo increasing my curiousity
and you ofcourse know how much i love the spy thriller/love stories <33
lolz why do i have a feeling that rose gonna make dan's life a roller coaster ride ;)
haha we will see
dont worry loads of masala coming up..trust me u'd love Dan-Rose...they are fireworks together😉😉
Radsy i soo regret commenting before
this piece is awesome !!!
i am soo gonna wait for next chappy
love ya :*

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Rads

@Effervescent_R

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Posted: 10 years ago

Chapter 2
Destination...".Chaotic"

I switched on my TV and wasn't disappointed one bit , the news was spreading like Fire..I couldn't help but smirk when I saw the Infamous Nicky Benedict all over the place , at the same time I hated absolutely everyone for "Faking it" vouching for her goodness...making her look like some Warrior Princess..she was none of that..she was Shallow with nothing except that oh so pretty face...her death was justified in every way...whether people admit it or not!!
Who Am I you ask??
well for the time being u can call me " the Dark Prince"
sounds a bit Cliche? so be it..I don't care...just know one thing I strive for justice and achieve it too in my own twisted way
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Time is of great value I hurdled my team in and briefed them of the situation..they were all co-operative I asked my friend and partner Zach to take over DC and headed towards the aerodrome , a Duffel bag in my hand...I m usually traveling all the time so my essentials are usually already packed..."things are moving..moving very fast here" echoed in my mind as I boarded my plane and read the various paper cuttings and other notes I had jotted down so far regarding Nicky Case as I took my seat..no one had seemed to occupy my adjacent seat yet, much to my relief I didnt want any distraction and that is when She came in,all the heads turned . I have to admit she was prettier than what she looked on tv...The Ace Journalist Rosaline Bradford...but I so didn't want her to sit next to me I rather wanted to concentrate on my work at hand.Plus the girl had the guts to give some nasty comments about me in an so called Page 3 party held in honor of a Freak teenagers are crazy abt these days some new teenage pop singer I was there only because my team had been recruited for safeguarding the brat by his concerned parents
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It seemed to be a typically bad day for me I had to rush out as soon as possible...I just had the time to grab my already packed bag and leave and when I say say it was bad I really mean it, half way through I broke my sandal and I am supposed to be a public figure of sorts coz at the end of the day everyone watches news on TV these days..it was so embarrassing to walk ,rather run barefoot with ur broken sandals in ur hands and a dozen heads turned towards you...I wanted to scream aloud..."Cant I have some privacy" but couldnt...I made my way to the aerodrome and realized at Ihad almost missed the flight I ran like crazy only to realize that I was sharing my seat with the Hot Shot Dan - The PI I had so conveniently bashed just last week...What a start!!!

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WhisperOfDreams

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Posted: 10 years ago

OMG partner...have u nyidea hw gripping you makin this entire story out to be..!! Uhhh the fact that i juzz dont seem to be able to get over this book is a fact...!!
Gosh the way you rote the chappy gal u hv improved so much and becum a awesome writter...!!
With everythin written to perfection...!! So They finally meet.. oho u donno i hv strted imaginin the actors who can take up their role so i cn imagine the story..!!
GOSH finally i can say the ggame has becun and i cnt wait to read this story more and more!!

regards

safrena

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Rads

@Effervescent_R

IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 10 years ago

This content was originally posted by: forevermine
OMG partner...have u nyidea hw gripping you makin this entire story out to be..!! Uhhh the fact that i juzz dont seem to be able to get over this book is a fact...!!
Gosh the way you rote the chappy gal u hv improved so much and becum a awesome writter...!!
With everythin written to perfection...!! So They finally meet.. oho u donno i hv strted imaginin the actors who can take up their role so i cn imagine the story..!!
GOSH finally i can say the ggame has becun and i cnt wait to read this story more and more!!
regards
safrena

OMG!! Such a wonderful comment...u just made my day Partner...
love yaaa❤️

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Ishta

@yoyolo

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Posted: 10 years ago

Loving it, Radsyyy ! 🤗

Really nicely written and my most favourite part would be ... the "Dark Prince".

Ohhh, how I LOVE that ! And I love you for finding this amazing name idea ! ❤️

Really excited to read the next part !

And especially to discover some more about the Dark Prince... hahahah 😈

Much love :*

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