Originally posted by harinisriram39
Hearty Congratulations Shreya !!!! for Book 3
Who would believe that this is the work, creativity of a 16 year old (ofcourse now 18). For your age, you are one of the best fan fiction writers I have ever come across.
I still wish that the director/creatives of PKYEK could read this. Agreed that there are a lot of Abhiya fan fictions. But this is one of the best. Mind blowing.
As much as I like to be praised, half the plot was revised once Reina came into the picture. In my first draft, Reina wasn't there at all.
Coming to the update... Its full on full action packed. So fast paced and I thoroughly enjoyed it.
Then again you know, I have my usual questions and comments. Please do bear them.
Abhay saw Piya go to the office. He then receives a call from Haseena asking him to come home immediately. In the whole of the update we dont seem to get why she needed him so urgently. Will we get to know about this in the next?
Not in the next. But maybe in the next to next.
Abhay caught the scent of Maithli and he sees Reina instead. Reina is bruised. He tells her that he knows her identity and she asks him not to reveal it for the time being.
"I am, already," he said evenly. "And that's because I know you've been looking out for her." Reina nodded, then turned to leave, Were they referring to Maithili. Is she the one who attacked Reina. Did Reina know of the planned attack of Dipannita on Piya. Even if she did, she did not seem to hint about it to Abhay.
Abhay offers to heal Reina, but she refuses his offer and leaves. Then Abhay seemed to be drained of energy, even though he had been recently fed, and takes some rests. He has a dream of Piya in trouble and she pleads him to stay away. But he pushes back the dream and starts concentrating on whereabouts of Piya. Is this dream a hint that Piya is in trouble because of Dipannita or does this dream mean something more. Earlier also he had similar dreams of Piya.
Firstly, Reina isn't God. so she might not have known. With regards to Abhay, what I meant was that he is emotionally and mentally tired. he would have been anyway even if he had not come.
Piya didnt want Abhay to come, remember? And Abhay does get sketchy visions of her. It's one of those.
Then coming Jeh. He had made up his mind to leave the clan. This is the same I hoped for Jeh's character. He was definitely not evil. His family wanted to avenge Abhay for the death of his brother. But Alina did talk sense to him that the death was a result of a fight and not something premeditated. Then comes Piya, Jeh may have come close to her to bring back Abhay. But he did fall for her and desired her. He would rather wish her die than Abhay have her.He still liked her in his own way and could not bring himself to kill her. He could neither back off from the orders of his mother - a Luna wolf nor could he harm the girl he liked. So the best thing for him is to leave the place and their is none another than Alina to caution about any danger to Piya. I always hoped for this kind of ending to the character of Jeh. I never wanted him to die. Thank you very much for this kind of end for Jeh.
Thanks. I'm mostly relieved- he wasn't really needed for this story.
Then Alina - she wanted to go immediately to save Piya and was halted by Dishu. So Dishu knows everything about the supernatural world and the dangers and consequences of it (Ofcourse this has been revealed earlier also) but how does a librarian come to know about all these things?
Alina fainted in office and Sid brought her to Dishu's home. So why did Alina suddenly faint. Was it the same time when Abhay meets Reina in the forest. Reina was also bruised and we have Alina in an unconscious state in her office. Reina is bruised, Alina unconscious, Abhay drained of all his energy after meeting Reina. If Alina is not Reina, do they share their minds?
Let's look at this from an entirely factual POV. Is Dishu just a "librarian"?? You forget that Dishu is Alina's best friend. Her "family" as she tells Sid. If Piya can find out about Abhay, is Dishu so dumb that she cannot find out about Alina?
Abhay was NOT drained of energy physically after meeting Reina.
And why are you fixated that Alina cannot be Reina? I have never said that Alina is not Reina.
Coming to the action scene, it was really fabulous. One can seriously imagine the fight and feel it.
So Sid had seen in his mind what Alina was upto and came to help them. And finally Dipannita Khurana is dead. Killed by Piya as an action of defense to save Abhay.
Who could have thought of this.
I didπ
Then again I was confused here
"May I?" he asked quietly. "What?" she asked, dazed. Without replying, he dipped his head, his lips touching her neck. Her hand clenched involuntarily- and then she felt the sting of something sharp grazing her neck. Almost at once, Abhay drew away. He was gazing at her in horror, and she could see her own blood on his fangs before he retracted them. "Piya-" he sounded shaken. "Please . I can explain- I didn't mean- I would never-" Piya stared at him in confusion. What was he talking about? Her brain had become jammed. "What-"
Does this mean that Abhay could not control his thirst when he first saw her throat bleeding and later gained control and drew himself away. But when he said "May I", I thought he was going to heal her as he was trying to be calm and also calming her when she burst out at him. But after seeing the blood, did he momentarily loose control.
This is why I believe this was one of the weakest parts of my writing. Abhay wanted to heal Piya and wanted her permission for the same. But the taste of her blood was too much of him, and he nearly bit her.Once again, my weakness for not spelling out everything comes back to bite me.
So now finally Abhay is aware that Piya has got back her memories and Sid was aware of it. Now that Piya has left with Alina and the wolves gone, it is only Abhay and Sid in the forest and there was Dipannita's body.
Piya flung the dagger where it the heart of Dipannita. So the dagger must still be there on her body. Will the brothers notice that and get to know that Piya was in possession of the dagger which was once gifted by Abhay to Piyali and somehow Piya knows Piyali.
They will not know about the dagger. And I won't say why yet.π
Where was Reina all the time? And what happened to Maithli after she attacked Reina?
Reina will never reveal herself in company. not till her mission is accomplished.
Oh Shreya, this is really a fantabulous update. Thanks for the quick update. I was expecting the update of C&C and this came as a surprise.
I won't be updating it for quite a while now so don't expect π