JAJ SS Dil Kya karein *part 11,Pg-34* updated!! *new part up* - Page 5

Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by -Priyam-




thank you so much sumi. You're such a sweet heartβ€οΈβ€οΈπŸ€— Wish you a very happy Pongal as wellπŸ€—

yeah abt tht last part. I decided to add more suspense. Glad u liked dearieπŸ˜ƒπŸ˜³


Aww NY pleasure and ur my Jaani πŸ€— ❀️❀️

Same to u, love u n loving d suspicion part .
Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by .nightqueen




Aww NY pleasure and ur my Jaani πŸ€— ❀️❀️

Same to u, love u n loving d suspicion part .


awww.. same here jaaniπŸ€—πŸ€— lovee ya❀️
Posted: 10 years ago
Hello -Priyam-
I'm athi nice meeting u.
I came here by chance as the title of show interested me.
I hv nt seen Hindi show.  I know the English version. 
Used to watch re runs in summer. So I was excited to read your story. This is the 1st thing caught my attention. V interesting. You write so well. Dialogues are so nice.
Waiting for next part :D
tc


Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by AASUS


Hello -Priyam-
I'm athi nice meeting u.
I came here by chance as the title of show interested me.
I hv nt seen Hindi show.  I know the English version. 
Used to watch re runs in summer. So I was excited to read your story. This is the 1st thing caught my attention. V interesting. You write so well. Dialogues are so nice.
Waiting for next part :D
tc




Hey Athi. Nice name..😊 Oh thanks so much dear!πŸ€— I mean I wrote only three parts that too involving everyone trying to get closer to loved ones n all.. but thank you! I hope u will enjoy the further parts as wellπŸ˜ƒ I've not seen the english show, but had a chance encounter with JAJ on the very day it started n I was hooked. I love this show so much because it brings a smile on my tired face before I go to bed..😳
Welcome to the forumπŸ€— Hope u have a fun time here😊
Posted: 10 years ago
I'm a huge fan of Karan Kundra n Sukriti. So I decided to imagine them as Shizo n Pari. Aww I miss Karan on tv... anyways here's character intro for all u guys. Its easy if we imagine an actor playing a particular role in our story. Isn't it?πŸ˜‰



Part five


Jhonny, Shizo's apartment:


"Raat k do bajgaye! Tu abhi soya nahi? Yeh kya? Zara hum bhi dekhien? All you need to know about Aircraft management? Yeh pad rahe the tab se?"πŸ˜‰

"Shizo! Gimme the book! Padne do yar!"😑

"Kya baat hai huh? Ithni mehnat tho tum ne school mei bhi nahi ki hogi.. ab kyu kar rahe ho?"πŸ˜†

"aise hi. Give me the book.."😳

"Nope!"

"Shizooo"

"Jhonny. Bolo tho kya hai-"

"Kuch nahi leave it!"😳

"Naa. Bolo warna bhari padega tujhe!"

(sigh) " OK. Woh actually Priya Ji ne kal.."

"hmm..."

"chod na yar.."

(laughs) " Nahi"πŸ˜†

"Woh Priya ji ne kaha ki unhe jhoot bolne wale pasand nahi. Yeh job tho mujhe jhoote tareeke se mili hai. But ab isey sacchi mei nibhaana chahta hu.."

"Achha? wah beta wah! Mera bas chale tho main tujhe Ashiqui 3 mein hero banaata.."πŸ˜›

"Tu bhi na yar. Ab chod, mujhe padne de.."😳

"Arey nahi yar! padna nahi. Sona hai tujhe! Warna kal Priya ji ko accha nahi lagega ki tum late hogaye!"πŸ˜‰

Jhonny obeys n walks off after giving him a hug.

" 'night Shizo.."

" 'night John."

A few minutes later~

shizo is about to call off the night when lights dim.

"Lights ko kya hogaya?"

Shizoo..

that voice. It can't be her now! Its been 10 years. Ten freaking long years since he heard her voice.

"Pari.." he turns around and its her!😭

"Pari tum yaha??" 😲

He runs to hug her only to pass through thin air that held her image.

"Yeh sirf meri parchaayi hai.. jo humesha tumhare saat hai Shizo.."

He sighs. Of course she's not physically present but she resides in his heart. His pari.. still he wished he could see her! touch her n hug her! Only if she would let him...

"Kaash yeh sach mei tum ho.. aur sab kuch pehle jaisa hojaye!"😭

"Hojayega Shizo. Par abhi nahi... Jinn Jaffru aur Jin Jalal..."

"Kya? Unhey ab aur kya chahiye? "😑

"Shizo shaant hojaao. Shizo unko tumhare bare mei sab patha chal gaya hai. Woh tum se badla lene yaha zarur aayenge! Careful Shizo.."😭

"Pari par kaise?"

"See you Shizo. Take care. Stay safe!"😭

"Don't go. Mat jaao please.."😭

But she's gone. A moment later he crumbles down onto the floor crying. Someone touch him on his shoulder. He gets up brushing his tears. Lights are now back to normal. And he knows who this person is.

"Johhny tum soye nahi?"

"Shizo. Kya tha woh sab?"

"Kuch nahi.."

"Don't even lie to me! Sach kahoge tum.."

"Long story.."

"I can listen yar.."


Shizo narrates his flash back. 10 years ago..

Flashback..
Shizo, Pari r childhood sweethearts. All was going well, until a magic competition changed their lives.

"Pari ka bhai aur main Jaadu-giri competition mei hissa lene gaye. Comepetion k aakhri round tak woh pahunch gaya. Pata nahi kya hua. Jung shuru hone pe woh waha nahi aaya. hum ne bohot dhundha. But woh gayab hogaya. Pari k papa gussa hogaye. Mujhe pata chala ki yeh Jinn Jafru Jin Jalal ka kaam hai. Maine aur PAri ne prove kardiya. Unko Jail pahunchaa diya. Par- Prem ki maut k baad, Papa ji ko meri shakal bhi nahi dekhna tha. Issliye maine unsey waada kiya ki main waha kabhi nahi jaunga."

Shizo goes on.

"Do saal pehle. Papa ki maut hogayi. Pari akele padgayi. Par woh Jinn Jaffru k aadmi, un logo ne mujhe dhamki di ki agar main ussey mila tho woh ussey bhi maardenge. Ab seedha yaha aarahe hai woh log,."


end of flash back

"
Jhonny! Jhonny tumhe khatra ho sakta hai. I'll fight them Kahi chale jaao Jhonny. Please go!"

"Relax Shizo. You're my buddy. Aur musibat k waqt main tumhe akela nahi chodunga.. yeh jung ab humari hai dost. Hum unhey haraayenge. Aur tumhari Pari tumhare saat hogi. Trust me!"😊

"But Johhny-"

"No buts!"

Jhonny hugs him and they smile. All is going to be well, eventually.

Next morning:

Jeannie n Jia get to know about Shizo's past. Even they join the fight against Jinn Jaffru & Jalal. Little do they know evil began to stir in their surroundings already.




Edited by -Priyam- - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
Wohoo cant wait πŸ˜ƒ m soo excited ❀️
Posted: 10 years ago
hey u r online. arey yar maine jo bhi llikha tab close hogaya n sab gaya.. typing again πŸ˜”

will update in a while. thank you sumi :)
Posted: 10 years ago
Aww that's bad to know , such a pain for ya πŸ˜” .

Awesome update just loved it and poor Shizo 😭

and loved johnny our hero 😎
Posted: 10 years ago
yeah I felt so bad but had to type it again.. warna dobara fursat kahaπŸ˜†

thank you sooo much Sumi. Glad u liked.πŸ€— Nxt part will include the whole gang in action.πŸ˜‰
Posted: 10 years ago
wow amazing update loved
and u did right that u added sukirti becouse i am a big fan

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