Kisha & Rahi FF *who's there?*part-4 pg11 - Page 7

Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by s2singh


Stavan plsss join TBP ka Creative team...they really need u right now, kya dimag chalta hai yaar tumhara...awesome, ek bhi line ek bhi part boring nhai tha...so crisp... mazza agaya...
I wish tumhari story koi padhe aur uspar se Arhad aur Pal ka serial ho...

loved it ...amazing ye sab sun kar bore ho gaye hoge na...Toh ab ye suno...Dhasu tha Dhinchak tha..dhamaka tha...Sutli bomb tha... lolzzz i am going crazy abt this FF...i am just going crazyy...

Sorry again 4 late comment, actually i missed it yaar...mene padha hi nahi... i got ur PM, per net bahaut slow tha so i thought ki baad main padhti hoon... fir mene padha nahi aur baad main bhul gai...😃😃...

Phew bada comment ho gaya


thank u so much di . I am glad u r liking this ff. Thanks for appreciating it .
 
wow di itne sare adjectives mere ff ke liye thanks a ton . Thank u for encouraging me . It means a lot
 
its okay di no need of sorry . U r comments always encourages me so thanks 😊
Posted: 10 years ago
Woww I loved this one the mostof any of youe s f it soo balanced mysterkouslyas well as scene also
But plzzz make it little bigger updayesplz
Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by NaughtyRa


Woww I loved this one the mostof any of youe s f it soo balanced mysterkouslyas well as scene also
But plzzz make it little bigger updayesplz
thanks a lot
I am glad u like it. Thanks for appreciating.
I will surely try to give bigger update😊
Posted: 10 years ago
PART-3
 
It is monday morning and the appartment of buddies had turned into local train ..
Kd: kiya plzzz jaldi bahar niklo washroom me se
Kiya: shutup kd
panchi: nonu utho kitni der se utha rahi hun ..
Ranveer: moti thodi der aur sone de ...
After all hustle they finally got ready and went to college ..
At college buddies were attending lectures when their cellphones beeped ...
msg "The luxurious 5 star hotel stay at maldives for 3 days 2 nights just for Rs 30,000"
After lecture buddies are in canteen
Kd: guys mujhe dekho yeh msg aaya tha I mean 30k ..
kiya: oh mujhe bhi aaya tha ...
panchi: me too
Rv: mujhe bhi ...
and than all look at each other and started laughing ...
Kiya: but guys yeh hotel kitni awsome hain na ...
Panchi: haa yaar woh toh hain ..
Rv: girls ab itne saare paise le rahe hain toh achi toh hogi na ..
Than Kd had some sad expression and left by saying he has some work... Kiya noticed this and followed kd ...Kd went in an empty classroom . Kiya than kept hand on his shoulder .kd turned ..
kiya: kya hua kd ???
kd: aah nothing chalo canteen chalte hain..
Kiya hold his hand and said: kd kya hua ??
kd: kiya mere pass itne paise bhi nahi hain ki main tumhe waha holiday ke liye le jau . I mean meri wajah se tumne apna ghar choda and iss chote se apartment main reh rahi hon . Tumhara akeli ka room hi humare is apartment se bada tha . I cant even keep u happy ..
Kiya : who said I am not happy?? And jaha tak baat hain uss holiday ki woh toh maine aise hi keh diya tha . And u know na u were not the only reason ki maine ghar choda I wanted my freedom isiliye I left my home ...so dont be guilty ..
Kiya gave a peck on his lips and said: chale ..
kd smiles ..
At the canteen panchi was running after Ranveer ..
panchi: nonu mere samose de do maine order kiye hain ..
Ranveer : noways moti ise toh main hi khaunga ..
saying this he started eating samosas while running .. Finally panchi caught Ranveer and hit him hard on his arm and snatched away plate ...
Ranveer pouted and said: moti ek toh de ...
panchi: aww somasa khana hai hmm toh khud order karlo huh
AT THE MALL
Kiyan worked at cosmetic shop as salesgirl. And ransh worked as salesman at electronic shop...
The person who was following kisha entered the shop were kiyan are working ..
the person to kiyan: mam yeh lo aap dono apne saare detalis is form main fill kardijie aur agar aap is lucky draw main jeete toh u will get free holiday at 5 star hotel in maldives that for 4 days and 3 nights aur air tickets bhi humari taraf se .
Kiyan were happy hearing this and asked for 2 forms
the person : mam aap dono ek hi form fill kare and if u win than u can come with whole family that is maximum 4 persons
Hearing this they got shocked ..
Kiya: what agar hum jeete toh 4 people ate allowed .i mean yeh koi joke toh nahi hain na..
panchi: exactly first only one form and than upto 4 people are allowed..
the person : no mam actually is hotel ke owner bohot hi kind and generous insaan hain . Woh har saal aise 3 lucky draws rakhte hain . He likes doing all these ..
he than showed pics of various families enjoying stay at their hotel . Kiyan were now convinced ... They filled up forms ..
AT APARTMENT
Finally kisha and rahi returned from their work . They were sitting in living room and kiyan were telling ransh about the lucky draw ...
Ranveer: kitna kind insaan hoga na woh owner ...
Kiyan: seriously ..
Kd was finding all this fishy ...
Suddenly kiya got msg and it said they won luckydraw and now day after tomorrow they have to leave for maldives .air tickets will be mailed ..if u wanna come than call at this no. and confirm it ...
Kiya got very excited and said : omg guys we won that luckydraw . Parso nikal na hain ...yipee
Rahi: wow yippeee holiday time ...
Kd: woah guys relax okay . I dont think humein jaana chahiye . I mean dont u find all these strange aaj hi humain us hotel ka offer aaya than aaj hi ushi hotel ka lucky draw contest and aaj hi result bhi announce kar diya. There is something fishy . I am not getting a good feeling about that ..
Ranveer: abey kd tu na kabhi toh doubt karna bandh kar.
kiya: exactly aur kya garbad ho sakti hain chill itna mat socho
panchi : ha yaar waise bhi we all need a break ri8
kd finally said yes but still was having a bad feeling about it .. 
kiya called and confirmed it ...
AT HOTEL ,MUMBAI
The person : yes sir woh chaaron maan gaye . Parso woh log waha honge. Yes sir the game is on ...
 
so guys here is part-3 . I hope thik ho . So plzz tell me hows it??
Edited by Prince6495 - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
Hey dear
wow the story is getting more and more interesting
so Finally they all are ready to go
I am really sacred for them
Love RaHi and KiSha moments
plz do continue soon
Take care

Geet

PS: yayyy,I am first one to comment🥳 
Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by sweetdesire


Hey dear
wow the story is getting more and more interesting
so Finally they all are ready to go
I am really sacred for them
Love RaHi and KiSha moments
plz do continue soon
Take care

Geet

PS: yayyy,I am first one to comment🥳 
thanks a lot geet
I am glad u like it
yup kisha & rahi in trouble
thanks for appreciating
it means lot
Posted: 10 years ago
Second ine to comment! 
Yayaya!
Loved this update the most!
I m a lil bit scared fo them like geet di !
 AnywYs,
I loved the story!
You are an amazing writer!
Keep writing! 
Update soon! 😆
Edited by tinaswea - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
Wow stavan...
Wat update...
Its was cute,a little emotional,funny,suspense...
Maza aagaya...
Awesome...

Posted: 10 years ago
Stavan what a fab chapter the mysterious feeling is just soo awesome you are making the story more and more intresting loved it
Carry on doing the awesome jab 👍🏼
Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by tinaswea


Second ine to comment! 
Yayaya!
Loved this update the most!
I m a lil bit scared fo them like geet di !
 AnywYs,
I loved the story!
You are an amazing writer!
Keep writing! 
Update soon! 😆
thanks a lot tina
I am glad u like it
thanks a lot for appreciating
it means a lot
I will update soon

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