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Originally posted by: Jhanvi_TaaReyThe OS seemed so perfect to me.
It of course, had its own flaws n errors, but I guess thats what made it shine.The girl was of course heart broken, but what made her shine and the way it was knitted together are the pros of the story. Well, the main con of this story that I didn't like was that she'd move on that easily? After all moving on is the hardest thing to do. You could have written about her inner mind n feelings to make this a bit more look like reality. Otherwise, the OS was amazing. <33Sorry if you felt my comment, rude. It wasnt meant to be rude, just honest. 😊 Sorry, again.Coming to the Author's Note:I wish you n your friend all the best of luck in your life ahead. I thank your best friend for bringing out the real n confident you, and also, for giving me my confident gaarlfraandAnd you know I love you, right? <33
I understand what you mean by flaws. I think its written in urgency, but still this thought is quite close to me as its my personal experience (90% of it) So I guess I forgot to put so much of mind in it. Even if it has flaws, I am all ok with it, cause I believe that a thing with errors is more beautiful😊 *that's my pov* And the thing you mentioned that was awkward like her moving on so easily, actually if you notice darling, in starting of every paragraph I said a line which meant a gradual increase in her confidence. The day she ignored him wasn't like she was just over him. She deliberately did that to start with and after wards as time spent, she started finding solace, his words stopped haunting her, she became more happy..as per me, I think I stated with each para such things which make it gradual change as moving on is not making instant maggi😆 *I have seen that* But ya! never feel hesitant to say what you feel about my works. Even If you find it bakwaas😕 because I should always be in check😊 I'll definetely try to improve my level of writing a bit😊
p.s. I'll tell my Bff your message😆
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