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Posted: 9 years ago
                                   Sareyaan nu Sat Shri Akaal😊

Well m gonna try my hand at writing for second time...first experience was really worse😆lets see if this works or not...but i bet...it will n one must read it..as its really gonna b amazing one😊

                               OH SOCHDI

Ik din Dadi ne Jeeta nu awaaz maari te keha mera gla bda suk reha hai...ja ja k paani le k a...dadi di awaaz vich Jeeta nu kuj theek nai c japeya.Pr Jeeta ne bina kuj kahe pani leya k Dadi nu de dita.Pani pee k oh lmi pe gai te shayad thode chir baad hi usdi akh lg gai.Jeeta ghabra gai kite Dadi theek ta hai,usne ja k dekheya ta usi nabaz chl rhi c.Oh apni Maa kol i te kehn lgi Maa menu ajkl Dadi di tabiyat kuj theek nai lgdi,menu lgda Baapu nu bula lena chahida(usda peyo kite pase kise factory ch kam krda c,te chira baad hi pind apne ghr aunda c)

Maa boli,aho bdi i Dadi di hejn..ja ja k apna km kr...bohta na socheya kr Dadi bare.Kuj ni hon lga ehnu,hatti katti pai a,eh ta sanu sareyaan nu maar k hi maru.Jeeta nu Maa da eh kdwa vivhaar chnga na lga.Te oh chup krke muh fula k chli gai.Dadi Jeeta nu bohat pyaari lgdi c,usnu pyaar jo bohat krdi c,Jeeta hr vele Dadi da dhiyaan rkhdi,usde khaan peena da,usde kpde leede da,usdi dwai da,usde peyo ne keha ju c Jeeta put bebe da dhiyaan rkhi,hun ehdi umar ho gai a,koi na koi ehde kol chahida hr vele,mein ta reh nai skda,is lai teri zimevaari te chd k ja reha mein Maa nu.

Jeeta ne bde yakeen naal apne peyo nu sir hilaya c k oh Dadi da khiyaal rkhugi.
Dadi neend to uthi te Jeeta nu awaaz mari...Jeeta put gl sun,mera jee bda khraab jeha hunda,kuj khta leya khaan nu,Jeeta dorhi hoi gai te Nimbu paani bna k le ai.Dadi ne Jeeta nu keha menu lgda mere din thode ne hun,tu baldev nu chithi likh de,ik vaari a jave.Jeeta Maa kol gai te kehn lgi Maa Dadi ne hun nai bachna oh kehndi a,mein baapu nu chithi likh k bula leni a.

Maa tut k pe gai Jeeta nu,kite ni marn lgi eh,kini vaar keha tenu zada na socheya kr ehde bare,pichle vaar v eve hi krdi c.Ki hoeya,tere Baapu ji ene paise barbaad krke chle gai..te eh ose do osi.Jina tng ehne menu kita eni cheti kithe mrna ehne.

Jeeta nu Maa diyaan glaan sun k Dadi naal nafrat ho jandi,oh Dadi diyaan lakh awazaan marn te v usdi gal na sundi,Usdi Maa ne dseya ju c ohnu k teri Dadi bohat kapati c.Kade ehne dhang de kapde ni paun ditte,akhe kehndi na tu kehde khasam nu vkhaune ne vadhiya kpde pa k,jinu vkhaune ne oh ta pindon bahar na.Kde Maa nu chnga khaan na dita,Baapu naal gal na karn diti,Bda kosdi c Dadi Maa nu,Jeeta nu Dadi bot gndi lgdi.

Dadi nu zor da athru aya te Jeeta dorhi hoi gai,Dadi ki hoeya,theek te hai tu???Tu chithi likhi a Baldev nu ya na???mein nai rehna hun,ohnu bula le,Oh sochdi Maa ne menu chdna nai j mein chithi likh ditti ta.Eh sochke oh fr chithi likhn da vichaar mn cho kd dindi.

Ik din Dadi di halat bot khraab ho gai,Jeeta bot dukhi hoyi,usne Maa nu keha mein keha c na Dadi theek nai rendi Baapu nu bula laiye pr tu hi nai mani

Dadi chl wasi,Jeeta bohat roi,fut fut k roi,usdi Maa ne usdi ik na suni,Oh sochdi mein Baapu nu kehda muh vikhavangi hun

Baldev nu pta lga ta oh wapis a gya,oh v fut fut k roeya,Maa mein tenu jandi vaar mil v na sakeya,mein wapis geya hi kyu,menu pta v c tu theek nai rendi.bohat roeya Baldev

Baldev ne Jeeta nu pucheya put Jeeta Dadi akhri vele kuj kehndi ta nai c,menu yaad ta nai c krdi,Jeeta de halkh vich jive awaaz ruk gai hove,oh kuj nai keh saki.
Oh sochi Dadi tu kyu mr gai,mein Baapu nu chithi kyu na likhi,Maa ne eve kyu kita.Usnu apni Maa te bot gussa aunda.Usne apni Maa naal gal krni v bnd kr diti c.

Baldev bot dukhi rehnda c,oh Jeeta nu puchda rehnda kite Maa takleef ch ta nai mri,kuj kehndi ta nai c oh,tu ohda dhiyaan ta rkhdi c na???ohnu kde koi takleef ta nai hon diti???

Jeeta gal da jwaab dite bina chli jandi te fut fut k rondi..Oh sochdi Dadi tu kyu mr gai,mein Baapu nu chithi kyu na likhi.

Ik din ik guandan ghr i te Baldev nu kehn lagi,Jeeta ne ta bachno di bdi seva kiti,rab ne saariyaan khushiyaan bakshe,Jeeta hi a jihda krke Bachno ene din kd gai.Guandan diyaan galaan jive Jeeta nu vicho vich kha gayiaan.Oh gum sum hi ho gai.Bs ik hi gal sochi,Dadi tu kyu mr gai,mein Bapu nu chithi kyu na likhi.

Oh sochdi

Umeed hai tuhanu sb nu eh kahani psnd aegi...j nai ai ta v ds deyo😆😆

Thankiu
Reet😃


Edited by ...sandhureet.. - 9 years ago
Posted: 9 years ago
Oh wow Reet ... applause for your attempt. Going to read it now 😳
Posted: 9 years ago
Oh. wow. That took me a while to read but that was quite sad. =/ I was hoping to see if she'd end up telling her dad about her mom but i guess that didn't happen.
Posted: 9 years ago
Originally posted by gk_09


Oh wow Reet ... applause for your attempt. Going to read it now 😳
Thankiu so much Gur..it means a lot😃
Posted: 9 years ago
Originally posted by Angel-Jot.


Oh. wow. That took me a while to read but that was quite sad. =/ I was hoping to see if she'd end up telling her dad about her mom but i guess that didn't happen.
M happy that u read it😃...yeah that dint happen..cox is to pehla k oh chithi likhdi Dadi mr gai😭
Posted: 9 years ago
good one, feeling really nice reading a punjabi ss in indiaforum.
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