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Posted: 9 years ago
hi guys this was just a random idea, don noe how it turnes to. i havn't mentioned names so u can imagine it on anyone...

In todays busy life, this is the only place which remains calm-the sea. And I love it here. This habit of mine started from my college days. And who am i? one of india's leading businessman and the world wait for hours to meet me. And me here on the beach watching the waves. My brother says iam mad to spend hours at the beach doing nothing. But it is releases all my tensions.

Well the world think differently. But not her. I have seen her here watching the sea. Its just the two of us at the beach at this time. She stands closer to the water than me, to mention a difference. I havn't  seen her face but her long wavy hair is so beautiful. She always stands at the same spot w/o any movement. I wonder what she must b thinking but I hav no clue.

Today was a hectic day n I went 2 my fav spot. But she wasn't there 2day. I wanted 2 see her, don't know why? I wanted 2 know what happened 2 her, don't know what? Wondering where was she was I looked around n heard a voice.

"are u looking 4 me?"

I turned around:"who r u?n why would I look 4 u?"

She sat near me:"I thought u know me. U see me everyday day"

I was confused:"r u the one ..."

"yes I am the one who stands there everyday"

"oh!"

Today was the first time I saw her face. N  I was lost in her. Her eyes told a thousand stories. She was a flawless beauty with a calm face.

"xcuse me, why r u staring?"she waved her hand.

"no I was just.."

"just what? I know men like .."

"you r beautiful"

"what?"
"nothing..i mean.. sea.. it is beautiful"

"right"

There was a long silence. Breaking it he asked.

"what r u doing here?"

"same thing u doing here"

"you r good with words"

She glared at him "thanks"

There was a pause. She then continued.

"sea is so calm. It feel so relieved"

"yes. Btw u stay here 4 long?"

"uhhh I don't know the time passing when iam here. I go when I feel like. And yes that's almost when u leave."

"you hav seen me?"

"fcourse I do hav eyes"

He smiled. She joined him. They looked at each other n was lost in each other, no one knows 4 how long. Suddenly his phone rang n he picked it up"hello...im coming". He continued"well I have to go. My princess needs.."and turned to her. She wasn't there. He looked around but she was nowhere. He left as his princess wont wait 4 long.

He reached home. His brother was in the hall."Bro, where were u,plz handle ur princess shes in her room"

He went to her room n saw her on the bed weeping. He sat near her "what happened?"

She hugged him "i cant sleep. So i hugged moms pic but still cant sleep"

He smiled at his 7 yr old daughter "u r juz lyk ur mom. She too cried wen she cant sleep"

"really dad? Is she watching me from heaven?"

"yes now close ur eyes im here"

After she slept he took the pic she was hugging. Those eyes still said a thousand stories just like they had when he first met her. He murmured "i miss u".


do leave a comment😳

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Posted: 9 years ago
Kirti...that was soo emotional
I loved it yaar...in fact it made my eyes moist...
A very nice idea n the mood is all sombre n moist n the end... ohhh god... felt for both the guy n his princess... 
N the little meeting in between screams love... can well imagine their bond... love how he recreates the whole thing yet returns to reality for his daughter... shows their true love...
Keep writing dearo...
Thanks for this
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Posted: 9 years ago
Res.
I will unres soon dear.
Unres.
Hey Kirti.🤗
Moi loved  it dearie.
I imagined it on RaHi.
Tumne emotional kar diya yaara,the bond of them in this os is very pure and eternal.
Loved how the hero went into the flashback mode in the beach and the phone call  immediately brought him back to reality,the bond of him and their princess in this OS was sweet.
Keep writing.

Lots of love.
Priya.

Edited by priya1101 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
amazing os..
well i imagined on kisha ..
i loved the way u described his emotions and how he was imagining their past ... Its pure love ..
and then their daughter loved their sweet convo and bond ..
a very emotional os loved it ...
and one line her eyes told thousand stories .. Awsome line ..
plz do write more..
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Posted: 9 years ago

IT WAS LOVELY & BEAUTIFUL OS KIRTI

REALLY LOVED IT, EMOTIONAL KARDIYA YAAR
HERO GOING INTO FLASHBACK THEN CAMEBACK TO REAL WORLD FOR HIS PRINCESS
AMAZING DEAR
KEEP WRITTING
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Posted: 9 years ago
This content was originally posted by: sneha02

Kirti...that was soo emotional

I loved it yaar...in fact it made my eyes moist...
A very nice idea n the mood is all sombre n moist n the end... ohhh god... felt for both the guy n his princess... 
N the little meeting in between screams love... can well imagine their bond... love how he recreates the whole thing yet returns to reality for his daughter... shows their true love...
Keep writing dearo...
Thanks for this

neha
thanku so much
n really,it was that emotional...
really happy that u liked it
will try to write more
welcome n thank u for reading n the comment
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Posted: 9 years ago
This content was originally posted by: priya1101

Res.
I will unres soon dear.
Unres.
Hey Kirti.🤗
Moi loved  it dearie.
I imagined it on RaHi.
Tumne emotional kar diya yaara,the bond of them in this os is very pure and eternal.
Loved how the hero went into the flashback mode in the beach and the phone call  immediately brought him back to reality,the bond of him and their princess in this OS was sweet.
Keep writing.

Lots of love.
Priya.

hey priya🤗
thanku so much
me too love the bond
i'll try more


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Posted: 9 years ago
This content was originally posted by: Prince6495

amazing os..

well i imagined on kisha ..
i loved the way u described his emotions and how he was imagining their past ... Its pure love ..
and then their daughter loved their sweet convo and bond ..
a very emotional os loved it ...
and one line her eyes told thousand stories .. Awsome line ..
plz do write more..

stavan 
thanku so much
that line was my fav too
wil try more

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Posted: 9 years ago
This content was originally posted by: viagomes

IT WAS LOVELY & BEAUTIFUL OS KIRTI

REALLY LOVED IT, EMOTIONAL KARDIYA YAAR
HERO GOING INTO FLASHBACK THEN CAMEBACK TO REAL WORLD FOR HIS PRINCESS
AMAZING DEAR
KEEP WRITTING

via
thanks a lot
happy u liked it
will try more
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Posted: 9 years ago
Hey Kirti dear
That was so beautifully written
Me simply loved it
You described everything so perfectly
So emotional
Love the flashback moments
Do write more

Geet