Originally posted by ARandKJFan
I don't know whether I can say this but I'm so proud of you maasi for writing this one shot, I really am.
Thank you so much niece Writing anything on death is tough, no doubt and especially pain of that of a child, a stranger is tough and you've done it extremely well.
I guess :/I wouldn't say this made me cry of that this made me really upset or sad. I don't really know why. I felt bad for the guy for sure but somehow, I couldn't connect, in that way. I did have goosebumps and cringed at some parts but couldn't feel the pity for that child and I'm in now way trying to affect you Maasi. :3 Finally😆 I got someone to find out flaws in the story. I really can't tell you how much I love you niece. Even I knew that I lack something in the OS for even I couldn't connect to it but then I didn't knew whats missing😕 Love you so much, now tell me where to improve too😆
I will say one thing, you've used language brilliantly. I can only imagine how the kid sat through it. The parts with the nails and blood is a definite favorite. <3 That was only thing that I imagined 😛
This somehow felt like death though. Maybe that's why I was unaffected. I've never feared death, maybe that's why it didn't affect me much. Haina? Even I never feared death, hell I am in awe with it. I take death as something glorious😆
But definitely, it is amazingly executed Maasi, it truly is. You've done your part very well. :)
I know you'll probably be pissed but I'm hoping I can be honest with you. :3 Anytime baccha🤗
I love you so much niece, trust me, I am not at all pissed. In fact I am one of those people who loves it when people point out flaws in their works, albeit in a polite manner though😆 That definitely tells me where am I going wrong and where I could improve. So, your honest views are always welcomed🤗❤️