Posted: 9 years ago
godd😲
so sad😭
poor boy😭
well-written aditi🤗
Posted: 9 years ago
oh my god aditi!
this was so painful!
i read this yesterday but could reply coz i was crying!
personally i hate tragedies! and this one!!!!
i have no strength to type now!
i'm gonna cry again i fear
so sorry about being late and not replying properly
-vinu

Posted: 9 years ago
So sad bt reality..
awesome written
Posted: 9 years ago
Res res res res   😆
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Wow! Do you have any idea how good you are at penning down certain feelings and emotions? 😃Omg..you described it so well ⭐️ And i love sad stories, so this one won my heart ❤️ 

Keep writing more sad stories. I'm probably the only person who wants to read sad stories 😛 But seriously you made me feel the pain. Above all this it was realistic, so i loved it moree 😳 
Edited by -ZaYalicious- - 9 years ago
Posted: 9 years ago
heart touching but painful... :'( 
Posted: 9 years ago
Originally posted by exhalelove.


You are a brilliant writer!
Who are you?😊
Posted: 9 years ago
Originally posted by ARandKJFan


I don't know whether I can say this but I'm so proud of you maasi for writing this one shot, I really am.Thank you so much niece Writing anything on death is tough, no doubt and especially pain of that of a child, a stranger is tough and you've done it extremely well. I guess :/
I wouldn't say this made me cry of that this made me really upset or sad. I don't really know why. I felt bad for the guy for sure but somehow, I couldn't connect, in that way. I did have goosebumps and cringed at some parts but couldn't feel the pity for that child and I'm in now way trying to affect you Maasi. :3 Finally😆 I got someone to find out flaws in the story. I really can't tell you how much I love you niece. Even I knew that I lack something in the OS for even I couldn't connect to it but then I didn't knew whats missing😕 Love you so much, now tell me where to improve too😆

I will say one thing, you've used language brilliantly. I can only imagine how the kid sat through it. The parts with the nails and blood is a definite favorite. <3 That was only thing that I imagined 😛

This somehow felt like death though. Maybe that's why I was unaffected. I've never feared death, maybe that's why it didn't affect me much. Haina? Even I never feared death, hell I am in awe with it. I take death as something glorious😆

But definitely, it is amazingly executed Maasi, it truly is. You've done your part very well. :)

I know you'll probably be pissed but I'm hoping I can be honest with you. :3 Anytime baccha🤗

I love you so much niece, trust me, I am not at all pissed. In fact I am one of those people who loves it when people point out flaws in their works, albeit in a polite manner though😆 That definitely tells me where am I going wrong and where I could improve. So, your honest views are always welcomed🤗❤️
Posted: 9 years ago
Originally posted by akankshaArsha


adi whats this...plz tu kya kya sun ke aati hai nd itna painful likhti hai fir...
this was depressing...7 year old nd such painful death...the way u wrote his feelings..his helplessness...goddd...its so painful...no words to explain how perfectly u wrote this...
i dnt know wat to say...its amazing...
What do I do if my teacher tells me such stuffs?😆
I will never consider your opinion, you always find my works perfect when there is not even definition of perfect. Such a hopeless case you are🤣 Still thank you for liking this piece😳
Posted: 9 years ago
Originally posted by sumimita


aditi this is not fair What do I do?😲

it is really very painful...

ab mind acha banane k liye ek happy wala os likho... I will give it a try, when I don't know myself😆


with lots of love
moumita
Thanks for your comment Moumita
Posted: 9 years ago
Originally posted by neha_bbsr2005


He was only seven and had to die like this 😭 Its really sad and depressing..
But brilliantly written.. My heart went out to him.. 😭

Thanks Neha😃
I know man, thats very saddening😭

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