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Originally posted by: gadhadada

OML! its too Short Parriii Baccha...😉🤣

its really SHORT...😉

Sweet and somewhat Nice too...😳👏

I really Enjoyed the Ride...😃👏

the Length at some place bored but its OK as Ur First attempt...😊👍🏼

Thank You so much Baccha...😳😳

Nice attempt Pari. Nice to see some khoons and khabris in a birthday story thread. I wish you hadn't injured Abhijeet on his bday, but since it's your first story it's ok. 😊 Do write more. 😃

Originally posted by: Abhi-Anamika

Read the first part/post.it's really interesting...😃

Originally posted by: Abhi-Anamika

Read it...😛
OMG...pari...so..lovely story dear😛.thank u so much for it.😊...i really enjoyed a lot reading this.every scene was nice...Loved duo conversation at the beginning..when Abhi sir kidnapped,i was 😒..mujhe rona a raha tha unhe aise dekhkar.😭.last scene with li'l shreya was awesome...👍🏼..really a Very sweet story...thank u so much...😛

Originally posted by: HimaniCID

First of all sorry for this super late fb coming in ur way. Tell me one thing Pari, is this a short story!!??

okay baba... long...😆😉

OK, coming to the story, it was nice. A different plot, at least for a birthday story.

Thank you...😛😛😛

So, first of all, congrats for handling a unique story line so very efficiently⭐️👏.

Thank you so much dear...😃😃😃

 At most of the places, dialogues are appropriate and flow of emotions, realistic, but at few, emotions are bit exaggerated, what I felt, so don't mind.

why should i mind...😕😕

okay u want me tooo...

 Otherwise, the story is very promising and has the power of holding the reader throughout.

sab aap ki hi kripya drishti ka kamal hai...😉

Loved duo conversation and the last sweet fight was also good. The gift by Daya sir was so touching...

arey... wo to hona hi tha... afterall he knows his buddy pretty well...😛😛

And yeah, the underlying message, that u wanted to convey is so very true and noble.

wo parii ko thoda gyan share karne ka man kar raha tha...😆😉

Great attempt👍🏼. Looking forward to read more from u😃