PYAAAR-Fan Fic *imp* note. see page 5 - Page 2

Posted: 17 years ago
great part 👏 👏 plz continue soon
Posted: 17 years ago
Awasome 👏 👏 👏 I am wondering what will happen next pls cont soon
And can you also cont you other fanfic 'Love is Beautiful'. I love that as well 😃
Posted: 17 years ago
Awasome 👏 👏 👏 I am wondering what will happen next pls cont soon
And can you also cont you other fanfic 'Love is Beautiful'. I love that as well 😃
Posted: 17 years ago
Chapter four

Next morning nimmo is woken up by jaanvi, and jaanvi gives her some interesting information.
nims: kya baat hai jaanvi? itni subah subah:
jaan: nimmo, tumaara cell kahaan hai?
nims: yahaan table par.
jaan: lekhin, meine usme phone kiya aur...
nims: oh sorry yaar, meine usse switched off rakha hai.
jaan: switched off: lekhin yeh kaise ho sakta hai? lekhin kisi ne mere call ko receive kiya tha.
nims: kya?........................kab?
jaan: kal shaam ko! uska naam tha kunal.
nims: kunal????
jaan: haan, aur tumhe patha haiusne kya kahaa?
nims: kya? kya kahaa usne?
jaan: usne kahaa ki tum apne boyfriend ke saat bahar gayi ho.
nims: wat?
jaan: haan nimmo.
nims: oh my god. abhi phone karke poochthi hoon.
she takes the cell and dials her cell number and kunal was still asleep, but he picks it up.
kunu: hello?
nims: hello, mein nimmo..........
kunu: are, maine kaha na, nimmo yahaan nahi hai. woh apne boyfriend ke saat baahar gayi hai.
nims: stop it Mr kunal. mein nimmo bol rahi hoon.
he gets up and scratches his eyes......
kunu: wat?
nims: tumaari himmat kaisi hui mere baare mein iss tharah jhoot bolne ki?
kunu: oh, mein bas aise hi.....
nims: kya yahi tumaari descency hai?
kunu: maine kuch galat toh nahi kahaa.
nims: kya matlab?
kunu: toh kya? tumaare kitne boyfriends hain?
nims: excuse me! mera koi boyfriend nahi hai.
kunu: achcha? toh yeh sunny, vishal, candy, yeh sab kaun hain?
nims: oh.....toh tum inhe mere boyfriends samajthe ho? sunny is my neighbour aur woh 9th std mein pad raha hai. woh har roz mujhe phone kartha hai, doubts poochne ke liye.
kunal feels bad and embrassed.
nims: aur candy, woh mera cousin brother hai and vishal mera apna chota bhai hai. ok?
kunu: oh!!! i'm sorry, mein woh bas.....
nims: tumaari kitni girlfiends hain? tumhe patha hai, unn logon ne meri neend haraam kar di hai. raat saade bhaarah baje phone aa rahi thi, aur sab alag alag callers the. ek ki naam suman, phir jiya, tamanna, rita, preeti,...... patha nahi aur kitne hain?
kunu: hey, woh sab meri personal baatein hai. tum usme interfere math karo.
nims: achcha?? toh tum mere personal life mein interfere kar skate ho aur mein nahi kar sakti. wah kya baat hai? its disgusting.
kunu: mind your words. aur woh mere girlfriends nahi hain. just friends.
nims: mujhe koi pharak nahi padtha. lekhin tum..., kya tum ek ladki se iss tharah ki baatein karoge? mein tumhe dekh loongi aur.......
she looks at her phone.
nims: are iska battery charge toh khatam ho gayi hai.
jaan: woh sab chod. nimmo, mujhe kuch kaam hai, toh mein abhi jaa rahi hoon. tum auto pakadkar chale jaanaa. ok?
nims: ok. koi baat nahi bye
jaan: bye
nimmo gets ready and leaves for her office. there kunal also gets ready and is going in his car.
there was heavy rain the previous day, so there were puddles on the road. nimmo was walking as she couldnt gat any auto and she decided to walk till the main road.
while she was wlking, a car splashes water on her and she was all muddy. but the car stopped and out came kunal. as nimmo was bending her head down and wiping th water off her dress, kunal went to her and said.....
kunu: i'm extremely sorry.
nimmo looks up and both are shocked to see each other.
nims: tum??????????
kunu: tum??? are baab re, yeh mein kahaan phas gaya. phir se wahi ladki.
nims: tum gaadi dekhkar chala nahi sakte kya?
kunu: koi jaan boochkar aisa karega kya? aur meine tumse sorry bhi keh diya hai.
nims: sorry kehne se mera kapda teek toh nahi ho jayega na? abh mujhe ghar jaana padega aur office ke liye late bhi ho jaoongi. aur yeh sab tumhaari wajay se hua hai.
kunu: meri wajay se? are meine aisa kya galti kiya? tumse baat karna bekaar hai.jabse tumse mila hoon, mera jeena haraam ho gayi hai.
nims: tumaari, mera jeena kharab ho gaya hai.
she looks up at the sky and talks to god,
nims: kyun kar rahe ho yeh sab? tum mujhe kabhi bhi khush nahi dekh sakte kya? aur baar baar tum mujhe teek iske saamne kada kyun kar dethe ho?
kunu: hello???(he snaps his fingers in front of her face) yeh tum kya kar rahi ho? pagal toh nahi ho gayi.
nims: thats none of your business. lkhin mein tumhe chodoongi nahi. bye.
kunu: isse kya ho gaya? zaroor pagal hogi. mujhe kya pharak padtha hai. aur mein yahaan kada kada kya kar raha hoon? mujhe usse sorry nahi kehna chahiye tha. itni ziddi ladki ko meine kabhi nahi dekha. isse baat karna bekaar hai.
he leaves for his office. nimmo goes home and changes her dress. neeta asks her what happened and nimmo explains what happened. she leaves for her office. 

                                                                              to be continued.....

hope u enjoyed it. please post in ur comments.
LUV NANDINI Edited by nandini90 - 17 years ago
Posted: 17 years ago
Its too good. Cont soon 😃
Posted: 17 years ago
great story... i think if u keep writing this way.. it'll turn out way better than the original.. try to include some funny antics of KB as well.. n u cud even do a wee romance b/w KB n KK.. that wud be a fun parallel track.. ur doin a gr8 job.. thanks for ur effort..
Posted: 17 years ago
Chapter five
the same day nimmo comes back home with jaanvi. she tells her what happened at the road that morning. jaanvi simply laughs. on her way kunal calls her..............
kunu: hello, mein kunal bol raha hoon.
nims: haan bolo. mein nimmo hi bol rahi hoon.
kunu: actually i'm sorry. pichli baar meine tumse bahut bhuri tharah se baat ki.mujhe asie baat nahi karna chahiye tha.
nims: i'm also sorry. mein bhi tumaare baare mein bhuri tharah se baat ki.
kunu: so, that means, compromise right?
nims: right. kunal, toh mein apne cell kab le sakti hoon
kunu: aaj nahi. aur kal bhi mein tumse nahi mil sakta. kuch zaroori kaam hai.
nims: its ok. how about friday? barso toh tum free ho na?
kunu: patha nahi. check karna padega. ok then; bye
nims: lekhin tum.......................
but he had already cut the phone.
jaan: kya hua nimmo?
nims: kuch nahi. kunal keh raha tha ki kal woh busy hai. isliye mujhe aur wait karna padega. khair chodo, koi baat nahi.
they go home and the rest of the evening goes smoothly. the next morning, nimmo is heading towards jaanvi, who is waiting with the scooter. just when nimmo sat, KB came runing..........
kb: nimmo..........nimmo...........jaanvi............. rukho. ek minute rukho.
jaan: kya baat hai kantamaasi?
kb: tum donon ko anand bula raha hai
nims: lekhin baat kya hai.
kb: mujhe patha nahi. bas woh tum donon ko bula raha hai.
jaan: teek hai kantamaasi. chalo nimmo.
they go inside and the whole family was gathered there.
nims: kya baat hai papa?apne hume kyun bulaya?
anand: ek zaroori baat kehna hai beta
nims: haan papa, toh baat kya hai?
anand: aaj hum sab ek party mein jaa rahe hain.
nims: party main?
swati: wow, kitne dhin ho gayi ek party mein jaakar.
naina: haan, woh bhi humaare poore family ke saat. kitna mazaa aayega
nims: lekhin party hai kahaan?
anand: sehgals ki party hai.
naina: oh my god, unka toh bahut bada party hota hai
nims: lekhin hume kaun invite kiya hai?
anand: dadaji ne
nims: dadaji? woh kaun?
anand: woh mere boss the. jab mein kaam karta tha, woh mere bahut achche dosth ban gaye. toh mein unhe pyaar se dadaji bulatha hoon. aur unhe bhi wahi pasand hai.
nims: oh.......toh unhone aapko kyun invite kiya?
anand: meine bhi yahi kahaa tha. lekhin woh maan ne waale nahi the. isliye hum sab shaam ko che baje jaa rahe hain. sab thayyar rehna.
nims: lekhin papa, mein aur jaanvi toh che baje hi office se nikalenge. toh phir hum kaise..........
anand: tum donon, ghar aakar, phir thayyar hokar party mein saat saat aa jaana.
nims: ok papa. toh mein chalthi hoon. aao jaanvi.
they leave for their office. in the evening jaanvi takes nimmo to a beauty parlour.
nims: jaanvi, hum yahaan kyun aaye hain?
jaan: mein tumaari make over karne waali hoon
nims: what????? nahi bilkul nahi. aur tumhe toh patha hai ki mujhe yeh sab make up ya make over mujhe pasand nahi hai. toh phir tumne mujhe............................
jaan: relax nimmo!! dekho! hum sehgals ki party mein jaa rahen hain . kya tum wahaan aisi jaogi?
nims: haan. wiase mujhe natural rehna hi pasand hai. isliye chalo.....
jaan: nahi. aaj tumaara make hokar hi rahega. chalo mere saat. chalo..........
jaanvi forcefully takes nimmo inside and there starts the make over.
i cant put her appearance in words. so remember the day when kunal sees her after the photoshoot, before going to the tender office(7th september), now she looks exactly like that. but wait. we dont see her face now. lets now jump to the party.
kunal is walking around talking to all the guests. and suddenly he sees a girl entering at the door. he looks at her from the side, not from the the front. she was wearing a blue saree, open hair, matching ornaments. and then "oh no", the pallu of the girl's saree got stuck near the door. another girl who was coming with this girl did not notice this and she walks off. kunal goes near her, does not see her face. and straight away bends down to release the saree.
kunu: let me help you ma'am....
girl: its ok, i can manage.
kunal successfully releases the saree and turns around to see*****************************thud************************ ************* NATASHA...............................
I WAS ONLY JOKING, IT WAS NIMMO............................not natasha.
IT WAS NIMMO< NIMMO<NIMMO
at first he doesnt recognise her.
nims: tum??? tum yahaan???
kunu: lagta hai meine tumhe kahin dekha hai, lekhin kahaan???...........................
and then there is a circle of flashbacks--shop, road.....
kunu: tum??? tum yahaan kya kar rahi ho?
nims: pehle meri sawaal ki jawab do. tum yahaan kaise?
kunal was just staring at her beauty.

                                                          to be continued.......................

will they fall in love now? hope u enjoyed it. post in ur comments.
i would like to say something. i saw that my fan fic has been viewed by 411  members, but only  25  replies, including mine. i am happy that many are reding it, but i will feel happier if u comment what u think about it. and u can also suggest ideas, to improve it, as i am only a beginner in writing fan fics, that too in hindi.
LUV NANDINI
Edited by nandini90 - 17 years ago
Posted: 17 years ago
interesting fan fic.. would like to see where and how it goes... keep on continuing...
Posted: 17 years ago
Can't wait for the next part 👏 👏 👏

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